*BubblyWeirdo* asked: My friends say it does, but I think it has too little detail. Please help me. Chapter one “Now Tara, I don’t want to hear any bad news from Ma, while you’re staying with her. Understand?” Tara’s mother, Tasha warned, her ebony skin glowing in the bright sun. She stood tall in black [...]
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Could some one please give me some feedback on this?
Sexy Tuba asked: Chapter 1 my role as fate: It was 12:07 A.M. The sun was beating down but besides the heat it was near perfect weather. Unfortunately I couldn’t enjoy such a nice day. At least it wasn’t my last. The brief case felt slightly heavy in my hands. I walked up the the [...]
What do you think of my story so far?
Always in Your Heart ♥ asked: When life gives you lemons… make lemonade. That’s what my dad always tells me when I’m stuck in a crappy situation. But to be honest, I don’t think that advice will work this one out. It feels as if I’ve been given rotten lemons, with no juice left in [...]
is this a good beginning for my book?
Buzz L asked: A kiss from Mom and hug from Dad away before I get on the plane, I thought rolling my luggage behind me as we approached the boarding line. “Yes, I have everything, Mom.” She seemed too busy to realize I had answered her but surprised me with replying back. “Great, well are [...]
What do you think of my storyline so far, and what do you think of my writing style?
Always in Your Heart ♥ asked: When life gives you lemons… make lemonade. That’s what my dad always tells me when I’m stuck in a crappy situation. But to be honest, I don’t think that advice will work this one out. It feels as if I’ve been given rotten lemons, with no juice left in [...]
Is this story any good?
Kate asked: This is just the first little bit of a story I wrote. I want your honest opinion. Thanks! ~~~~~~ I grabbed my bag off the luggage carrier. This was my first cruise! I had turned 15 on Thursday, and this was my present. I was super excited. We had never really had enough [...]
Would you tell me what you think of my chapter 2, please?
Sharon D asked: Hi, I wrote this a while ago and don’t know what to do to make it better, I know its long and if you take the time I will really be very grateful x 2 “Here we go doll, 62nd street,” As Eddie helps get my luggage out of the trunk, I [...]
What do you think about the beginning of this story?
C asked: I’m just starting on a story, and I would like to see what people think of it. If you have any tips, contructive critisicm, ect, I would be more than happy to hear. And be honest! Thanks! “””Some girl’s long for attention. I, however, was not one of those girls. So when I [...]
What do you think of this?
{{ s i l v e r }} eριcαяιcαcу ♥ asked: It’s the first chapter to my cousin Layton’s story, Innocence is Bliss. She’s almost 14. ——————————— CHAPTER ONE “Mademoiselle Reid?” My attention was drawn away from the weight of my luggage to the suited man standing beside the midnight Cadillac before me. “That’s me,” [...]
Does the beginning of my romance story intrigue you?
hello asked: Or does it bore you? I had always been a suburban girl, so the notion of packing my few belongings in a pair of ruddy, ancient suitcases and moving to the country seems preposterous. But a marriage and subsequent divorce are also ludicrous ideas to me, yet here I am, holding the papers, [...]